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These are a few sample paragraphs from an archeological study grant application. It was written in Spanish by a student whose first language is Arabic. He also speaks French and is able to converse easily in English. Even with all that language skill, writing, especially scholarly writing, is difficult for a non-native. My client translated the Spanish into English, then I worked with him to correct the English and ensure it said what he intended. The application was accepted for final grant consideration. His project is now in final consideration for a one-year research grant.

The application was accepted for final grant consideration. His project is now in final consideration for a one-year research grant.

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The emergence of a funerary architecture is the result of the union of a number of socio-cultural factors, along with the construction and materials available at each time systems. There are even differences in architectural style as the time in which each technique is developed, as this is adapted to their socio-economic and cultural conditions. The mortual architecture is socially accepted as edilicia. The emergence of a funerary architecture unique to the region of the Levantine coast of Syria is the result of the union of a number of socio-cultural factors combined with the construction materials available during each time period of the proposed study. We find significant differences in architectural style even within the period in which each technique is developed, as the technology is adapted to the socio-economic and cultural conditions of the societies in question.
The ancient sites on the coast of present-day Syria, is known for its funeral arquitecure, because of the emergence of a wide range of funeral contenders in necropolis and / or isolated graves, containing a series of mortuary objects, such materials are test material human relationships with death, which has been intermingled despite the various material cultures, showing that on the coast of Syria, had never produced a disconnect between cultural varieties, on the contrary, a permanent contact. Structures built to accommodate burials, usually adapt the new rituals with cases of reuses or new constructions, which multiply in the cemeteries along the east coast of modern Syria. The funerary architecture of the ancient sites on the coast of present-day Syria is well-known because of the wide range of funeral containers and plentiful mortuary objects found in necropolises and isolated mausoleums of the region. These containers and objects demonstrate the relationship between the living and the dead, the material and non-material; they illustrate the continual interplay between them as the living continue to engage mentally, psychologically, and physically through funerary rituals with those who have passed on. Further, we see that the cultures inhabiting this region are never completely disconnected during the study period. This, despite the epochs that pass and the variations in the cultures that exist during the various time periods within the region of our study. On the contrary, the cultures and societies are in continuous and permanent contact even though they are physically separate and very different from one another.
This paper aims, first, to present here a description and detailed study of all hypogeal tombs documented, which are the material elements that are part of the tomb and its contents and archaeological contexts of burial practices are. The idea is to provide an overview of the main types of hypogeum tombs, on the coast of Syria. Analyzed from an ethnic, and class intercultural perspective archaeological material culture. This paper proposes to present a description and detailed study of all documented hypogeal tombs, which include their structural elements, their contents, and the archaeological context of the related burial practices. Our intention is to provide an overview of the main types of hypogeal tombs on the coast of Syria analyzed from an ethnic and class intercultural perspective in addition to an archaeological material culture.
The reasons for the ritual changing, could be through the process of acculturation and socio / political changes. Conduct a spatial analysis of the tombs, and their relationship continues with material cultures in the study area, will allow us to look into at the exact locations of the polis and necropolis, which are the two key elements in the expression of social relationship in any city-state. The study will consider the reasons for the evolution of funerary ritual and architecture which may be explained through processes of acculturation, social and political changes, or a combination of these and other, yet unknown factors. Conducting a spatial analysis of the tombs and their relationship with material cultures in the study area will allow us to look into the exact locations of the polis and necropolis which are the two key elements in the expression of social relationships in any city-state.
Make a summary of the development of societies across the hypogeum tombs throughout the period under review also a valuation of imports should not be limited to the typological study of objects will take place, but goes beyond considering the cultural interest of the society that used those mausoleums, and the experience of technological applications. We will summarize the development of societies represented in the hypogeal tombs throughout the period under review. Our evaluation of imported technology will not be limited to the typological study of funerary objects, but will go well beyond a simple consideration of the cultural interest, architectural techniques, and technologies of the societies that used those funerary practices-practices that exhibit variations even within the same locations and time periods.

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